Teh Wozzinator

Chapter One Part II “Ya!” A familiar cry sent a cold sensation up Aedomir’s spine and goose bumps erupted up his arm. As he turned around, he feared the sight ...

wow. your writing style is great. are you really only fourteen?? you've got a great story here (and yes, PG-13 fits), and with a little grammar clearing up, i think ...

ok, was good, just a bit confusing, becuase there wasn't much insight to the characters. hopefully later chapters will explain more. um, your thing that says: "Click here to see ...

ok, thanks! the stories that don't say "the magic of chocolate" probably won't be continued--at least not right these are probably better. :-D

what stabbing thing are you talking about?? oh, wait...did you already edit it out? ok... i was really confused about that. anyways, i thought that it was interesting...it's a little ...

Btw, all readers...i've decided that part one of this story will be called "The Magic of Chocolate", so that won't be the actual name of the story...also, part one is ...

ok, aet, i've edited it...maybe i'll post the story on nano, and then you can edit it MORE. lol

^_^ Much much better. Still quite interesting too. =P So looks like I skipped commenting on 3, it was good as well though. My mind is kind of blank lately, ...

wow, it's getting creepier than the other parts i've read...there are some grammatical errors i noticed when Yazra's talking to the little boy, but i don't have time to give ...

thanks aet. umm...i'll see about the edits one thing tho...Gray-side was always spelled with a hyphen

well...thanks for reading....

here's chapter four Four On Trial The police caught the young man, after about an hour-long chase, and brought him into a small building that smelled like eggs. The man ...

wow, this is really good. i like the end of the first paragraph (in the first story), and the entire chapter was great, altho the last couple paragraphs had me ...

wow, this is really good. i like the end of the first paragraph (in the first story), and the entire chapter was great, altho the last couple paragraphs had me ...

ah, that's the thing...he doesn't HAVE superpowers (i'll just tell you this now, since it isn't a secret), it's the chocolate that gave it to him...for a limited amount of ...